The day things started disappearing

This is my practice e-asstle writing I did, the task was to write a narrative about the day things started disappearing. I hope you like it! Also make sure to leave any advice on what I can do to improve :)

My eyes flicker and I see a bright light piercing my eyes.  

“Five more minutes please,” I groaned. I was expecting to hear my mother say,

“No Phoebe, schools about to start.” But all I got was silence. 

“Mum?” I called out, concerned. Again no response. I forced myself awake and went to go look for my mother, as I slowly shuffled down the hallway I took a glance at myself in the mirror, I gasped. Instead of my long blonde hair and bright blue-eyed self, a terrible monster stared back at me, it had green hair and its eyes were fully white, it had mounds of hair sprouting out from its legs. Its body was so slender and its face looked white as snow. It couldn’t be me, it just couldn’t. But sure enough, I looked down and saw the same, bear-like legs. I pinched myself, it must be a dream. But I stayed the same ugly monster.

I ran down towards my kitchen, tears squirting from my now fully white eyes. As I was sprinting down the hallway, the kitchen seemed to be getting more and more far away. I started to run faster desperate just to make it to the kitchen to see my mother, father and little brother Eli. I tripped in my place, looking up the kitchen it was fully gone, all I saw was a pitch-black hole twisting and turning in its place. I got up pacing the opposite, the force was tenacious and I was being sucked into a whirlpool and blacks, purples and little grey stars.

I must have passed out for a while because when I woke up I was no longer being pulled into a twisting blackhole, but instead, I was in a fully white room, I couldn’t tell where the walls were, nor the ground. Everything seemed a blur, I felt sick and queasy. As my eyes darted around the white, cloudy room, I saw a small figure standing next to me. A little boy it looked like. In shock, I rubbed my eyes blinking at the boy. As everything began to become clear again, I noticed that the person standing next to me was Eli. 

Eli didn’t look different, he still had his dusty blonde hair and emerald green eyes,

“Eli?” I wailed. 

Eli looked confused. 

“What?” 

“Where are we?” I said tear spurting from my eyes. 

“What do you mean, we’re in our kitchen!” He said, confusion stealing his face. 

Eli didn’t see it. It was only me, what had I done to deserve this? 

Eli started walking away, his red school bag shaking as he picked up his pace. 

“Wait!” I screamed, grabbing his small arm. 

“What do you want, Chloe, I have to go to school!” 

Upset I unclutched my hand from his wrist and watched him run into the distance. I lost sight of him and everything became blurry again. 

It was like everything had disappeared. Everything I once owned was now gone. As I pushed my face into my hands my hair touched my cheek. I brushed it off feeling that it was rough, feeling like straw. I looked around taking another look at my dreadful body. Abruptly the world flicked black. I couldn’t feel anything and my body was stuck in place. Two hands wrapped around my neck, 

“This is the day where things started disappearing, and now it's time for you to disappear.”

The voice of this person sounded very childlike.

I struggled, trying so hard to breathe but his hands were too strong. I tried to look at his face. My heart sunk, the person who was strangling me to death was my little brother, Eli. 

“Eli, please don’t!” 

“Goodbye Chloe,” He said, letting out an evil laugh. 

By Grace O